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Most scientific inventions and discoveries are worthless and only waste time and money resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

In the past few decades, scientific research and
inventions
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 have been developed a lot across the globe. Many of them are a worthless and total waste of money and
time
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. I am
complete
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 disagree with the given notion. In the forthcoming ,paragraphs I shall analyze my views on
this
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.
Firstly
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, communication devices are one of the greatest
inventions
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 of humans.
People
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 can talk to
another person
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other people
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 from far distances and other services like the
internet
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. It
is
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 invented in the early 90s for the military forces but later it
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 used for the public. Nowadays, many big companies are established
due to
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 the
internet
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.
For example
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, websites
such
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 as Amazon, Facebook and many others are successful at the present
time
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. These applications provide jobs to many
people
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 around the world.
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, all discoveries are useful.
However
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, it takes a huge amount of money and
time
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. In the
automobiles
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 sector, vehicles are used for travelling from one place to another and it saves a lot of
time
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 as compared
in
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to
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 earlier
life
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.
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, the invention of electricity that credit goes to Tesla and Edison both had a major role in the discovery of electricity. Nowadays, every
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inventions
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invention
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 and
life
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 cannot happen if these two incredible
people
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did take
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 their research on
current
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. To exemplify, Tesla's great discovery of the AC current which is why our house and building provide electricity. In conclusion, scientific discovery is very significant in
our
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apply
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today's
life
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. Many
inventions
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 are helping
people
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 to make their
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life
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lives
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 easier. We learn from our past
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life
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 and discover many things on behalf of
that
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those
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 previous things.

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task response
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents the main points and your opinion on the given topic. The body paragraphs should provide strong examples and arguments to support your opinion. Additionally, the conclusion should summarize the main points and restate your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a clear logical structure and coherent development of ideas. The connection between the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is weak. Use transition words and phrases to help the reader follow the flow of your ideas more easily.
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