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The government is responsible for protecting a nation's cultural identity. Thus, some people believe new buildings should be built in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Culture is the core foundation of any country. Ancient buildings and monuments are strong symbols
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 indicate the richness of the culture.
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, some believe that the new
constructions
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 should be
alligned
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aligned
 in a manner
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that
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preserve
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 the true identity of the culture. In my view, I am partially agreed with the
afforementioned
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aforementioned
statment
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statement
 and I will
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 illustrate my ideology in the
next
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 few paragraphs. The proposed practice is already
inplace
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in place
 in several
countires
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countries
. The most popular example is Italy where the new
constructions
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 are
throughly
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thoroughly
 governed with several laws
specially
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 in the areas with
the
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apply
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ancient
values
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. The positive trend is most of the other countries are
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adhereing
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adhering
 to the same practice and government and
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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 are in a process of imposing new rules. The preservation of cultural
values
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 would highly important to the countries which are relying largely on tourism income.
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 the contrary, the world is constantly enriching with new and effective engineering and architectural concepts.
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 new
constructions
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 could be planned to attain
great
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 level of effectiveness and space management.
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, it would be ideal to use the latest technologies and designs in new
constructions
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 rather than
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adhering
 to old designs. The said notions
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also
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very
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 crucial aspect to be looked at considering the significance of space management to cater to the demands of the growing population. In conclusion, it is agreed that preserving the ancient
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 when constructing the new buildings
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imparative
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imperative
.
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, the said
practice
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practise
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 should be limited to the areas which
has
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 significant ancient
values
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 while in other cases to use the most updated technology and designs.

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