The government is responsible for protecting a nation's cultural identity. Thus, some people believe new buildings should be built in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Culture is the core foundation of any country. Ancient buildings and monuments are strong symbols
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indicate the richness of the culture.
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, some believe that the new
constructions
should be
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in a manner
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preserve
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the true identity of the culture. In my view, I am partially agreed with the
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and I will
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illustrate my ideology in the
next
few paragraphs. The proposed practice is already
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in several
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. The most popular example is Italy where the new
constructions
are
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governed with several laws
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in the areas with
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ancient
values
. The positive trend is most of the other countries are
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to the same practice and government and
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are in a process of imposing new rules. The preservation of cultural
values
would highly important to the countries which are relying largely on tourism income.
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the contrary, the world is constantly enriching with new and effective engineering and architectural concepts.
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new
constructions
could be planned to attain
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level of effectiveness and space management.
Moreover
, it would be ideal to use the latest technologies and designs in new
constructions
rather than
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to old designs. The said notions
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also
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crucial aspect to be looked at considering the significance of space management to cater to the demands of the growing population. In conclusion, it is agreed that preserving the ancient
values
when constructing the new buildings
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imparative
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.
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, the said
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should be limited to the areas which
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significant ancient
values
while in other cases to use the most updated technology and designs.
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