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The government is responsible for protecting a nation's cultural identity. Thus, some people believe new buildings should be built in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Culture is the core foundation of any country. Ancient buildings and monuments are strong symbols
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 indicate the richness of the culture.
Hence
, some believe that the new
constructions
 should be
alligned
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aligned
 in a manner
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preserve
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 the true identity of the culture. In my view, I am partially agreed with the
afforementioned
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aforementioned
statment
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statement
 and I will
further
 illustrate my ideology in the
next
 few paragraphs. The proposed practice is already
inplace
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in place
 in several
countires
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countries
. The most popular example is Italy where the new
constructions
 are
throughly
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thoroughly
 governed with several laws
specially
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 in the areas with
the
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ancient
values
. The positive trend is most of the other countries are
also
adhereing
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adhering
 to the same practice and government and
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law makers
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 are in a process of imposing new rules. The preservation of cultural
values
 would highly important to the countries which are relying largely on tourism income.
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 the contrary, the world is constantly enriching with new and effective engineering and architectural concepts.
Thus
 new
constructions
 could be planned to attain
great
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 level of effectiveness and space management.
Moreover
, it would be ideal to use the latest technologies and designs in new
constructions
 rather than
adhereing
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adhering
 to old designs. The said notions
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also
very
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 crucial aspect to be looked at considering the significance of space management to cater to the demands of the growing population. In conclusion, it is agreed that preserving the ancient
values
 when constructing the new buildings
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imparative
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imperative
.
However
, the said
practice
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 should be limited to the areas which
has
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 significant ancient
values
 while in other cases to use the most updated technology and designs.
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