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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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It is believed that there should be a
course
 on the science of
food
 and how to prepare meal taught at
school
. While some people argue that
this
course
 is wasting time and that time could be dedicated to learning another more essential
subject
. In my opinion, I think
this
subject
 is nice to have in
school
, but should not be the main focus of the curriculum.
To begin
, having students study the science of
food
 could promote a healthier lifestyle, as students will have knowledge on what kind of
food
 is bad and good for their health, and how they can complete their daily nutrition intake by preparing a healthy meal.
Hence
, the frequency of them choosing fast
food
 will decrease ,
as a result
,
this
 will demote unhealthy consequences
such
 as obesity.
For example
, a
student
 knowing how easy it is to eat healthily will try to avoid junk
food
 as much as they can.
However
, it is arguable that teaching
student
this
subject
 in
school
 is time-wasting since
this
 skill could easily be learnt at home.
Student
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 should only just focus on the more general and important subjects at
school
such
 as Maths, Biology, or Physics, since not all students will be interested in
this
 particular
subject
,
thus
 causing them not to pay much attention to
this
course
, leaving the
course
 to be useless.
For instance
, a
student
 having an interest in Engineering would not be too excited to attend
this
 class, since he or she will think
this
subject
 will not help them in their college admission anyway. In conclusion, while the
course
 on the science behind
food
 can be eating up the slot on the already tight
school
 curriculum, the knowledge of healthy meal is still beneficial.
Therefore
, it is recommended to have them in moderation, slipping it in between another related
subject
such
 as Biology or Chemistry.
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