In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes and measures that should be taken?

In some nations ,
although
the percentage of serious
crimes
are declining
people
are more insecure than before.
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that
people
still have memories of their previous occurrences stored in their minds and
also
easily accessible on
internet
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making them fresh in their hearts. The suggested measures are that more seminars
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be conducted by security personnel and having a transparent way of dealing with
crimes
through media. Many still feel unsafe even though there is a fall in serious
crimes
that is
they are afraid of past experiences re-occurring again. No one desires to go through
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same
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painful situations due to
crimes
that occurred in their life because
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may have lost their loved one's whom they can see again.
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, they tend to have fear of
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cases happening again.
Additionally
, there are recorded videos on the internet of
crimes
happenings. Victims of these situations may be stressed or depressed due to watching these videos on the internet making them feel uncomfortable
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what may happen.
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Dursit attack victim by citizen TV in Kenya shows most of them feel unsafe. Several measures are to be put in place
that is
more seminars should be conducted by the police to give hope to
people
. It is said what you feed your mind is the outcome you get,
in other words
, many feed their minds with fear and if
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can use the opportunity to give hope to them affirming them of their safety will bring a huge change. To add
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this
, there should be transparency through social media for victims to get justice. Stealing from someone makes one distracted from the course he was doing and
thus
these case proceedings should be live for
people
to see victims getting justice.
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, in Kenya in
2017
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elections judges had a hard to administer justice because the whole country was watching them and by
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they gave a fair judgement. In conclusion, in spite
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crimes
getting decreased in some nations,
people
are feeling quite unsafe compared to before.
This
is because of storing
of
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previous
crimes
in their minds and being able to access past crime recordings on
website
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.
However
, the possible solutions are more meetings with residents on matter
security
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and fair judgement via social media.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • availability heuristic
  • media coverage
  • misinformation
  • urbanization
  • community cohesion
  • justice system
  • economic inequality
  • community policing
  • media literacy
  • surveillance
  • swift justice
  • social cohesion
  • neighborhood watch
  • deterrent
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