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Restricting mobiles in school, discuss advantages and state opinion.

Nowadays, we see a lot of schools restricting the use of mobile phones. Whether if it's the right thing to do or not is up to debate. My opinion leans towards the positive side more as compared to the negative one. Here, in
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 explain my stance on the matter. Mobile restriction can be beneficial as it will improve
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 will be less distracted and more focused on the tasks being assigned, rather than peeking at their phones in the classrooms. Nowadays, we have social media, which is very addictive and cause the
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 to easily shift towards it when they get a notification.
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 will be disturbed by the ringtones and in turn lose their focus.
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, a restriction will help
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 get away from their addiction and bring their concentration back to the lecture their teacher is giving. Another very important point to consider is the
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 it may have on our
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 who keep on using their mobiles do not socialize with others, which in turn affects their mental
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, it is important to realize the amount of radiation that can have adverse effects on the
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, a regulation on mobile phones will result in
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 better grades overall. Considering the implications of
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 and wellbeing, to avoid distractions in the classroom and counter addictive behaviours as I have mentioned above, I think it’s reasonable to assume that restrictions should
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 on mobile usage in an educational setup.

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