Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

In these
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days, human
have
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prone to various
problems
about the
environment
that affect our lives. From
this
point, people have different view about the serious issues of disappearing
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enormous animals and plants while the others believe that the great deal of the other concerns more pivotal than the previously mentioned issue. From my perspective, both
problems
play an equally significant role, which is able to
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threat
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the
environment
. There are several obvious reasons why people think that
the
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large plants and animals are
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a loss
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loss
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.
First
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reason is the animals are loss of their habitat considerably from natural disaster led to particular species are nearly becoming
extinction
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. Take the example of, Australia was suffered the biggest fire forest
problems
in the year 2019. The fire spread along whole the forest in few weeks due to the fact that amount of an animal and plants deaths took place
such
as koala which was seen endangered species. The various koala
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as well as the number of trees was on fire. From
this
point, the ecosystem is coming to reduce.
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warming and air pollution
problems
appear when the earth loss of green trees which create CO2
to
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the
environment
.
On the other hand
, another problem
are
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overpopulation that may lead
pollution
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about
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air
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, water, soil.
For instance
, in the
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city of
country
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where a lot of vehicles production meet the demand of human.
Nevertheless
, that type of vehicles released tons of poison
to
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the air led to
pollute
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more and more. That a reason why
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green house
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is
effected
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. Climate change
also
is happening.
In addition
, the industrial company is built more and more. After that, wasted water emit
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the river or lake led to the water pollution issue seriously.
Moreover
, the health
problems
will be
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to
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human. Many
disease
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make
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people’s health which
reduce
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. To sum up, it seems to me that both issues have a key role to play in the
environment
. The
goverment
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government
must devise
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policy to address some
problems
as well as awareness of human about protecting the
environment
better.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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