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The Most effective way to solve the current traffic and pollution problems in cities is to encourage people to move from the suburbs or country into the city Centre.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#traffic #pollution #cities #people #move #suburbs #country #city #centre
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Nowadays
pollution
 is a major cause
among
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 the world. Some
people
believes
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 that to reduce
pollution
 and traffic issue
people
 should
move
 from the suburbs or country to middle of the
city
. I propound that,
i
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am completely agree
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 with
this
 statement. Adequate evidence
are
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is
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 obtainable to substantiate the concept of
move
 into
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 is beneficial. The top-notch concrete reason is
people
 can save their time for all
the
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things. To elaborate the reason, if
people
move
 in
middle
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the middle
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 of
city
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the city
a city
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 so, they can travel in
whole
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the whole
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city
 in short time
also
 it becomes beneficial for their children , shopping purpose and in emergencies. Students can reach
at
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their school by walking
way
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away
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instead
 of
school
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a school
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 bus or private cars.
However
, for shopping purpose
people
 should not have to travel
for
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long distance
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long-distance
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therefore
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therefor
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therefore
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 it can be a reason to decrease the traffic and
pollution
.
Also
, it is more convenient for
them
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those
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 who works in the
city
 so they can use public transport
instead
 of private vehicles can become a
pollution
 warrior. Another regional which haul me to patron is,
people
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,people
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 become more aware
about
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of
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pollution
.
Generally
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,Generally
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 in
cities
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,cities
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 citizens are more knowledgeable and educated
also
 they follow the rules of government accurately about cleanliness.
People
 can be aware
about
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of
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 land
pollution
. In cities majority
people
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of people
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 prefer to dump waste in
waste
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a waste
the waste
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 collection box or waste collection cars so because of
this
 great activity land
pollution
 can
be reduce
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be reduced
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.
For instance
,
last
 year google showed
survey
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 about it and in that, amount of land
pollution
 is half of the suburbs and they showed cities are
more
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cleaner than suburbs areas. To conclude,
i
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I
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 reiterate that there
are
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is
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number
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a number
the number
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 of benefits to
move
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moving
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 in
middle
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the middle
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 of
city
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the city
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 which
are
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is
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also
 in favour to control the traffic and
pollution
 issues.
Consequently
,
i
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I
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 firmly agree with
this
 statement.
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