Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required . Discuss both this views and give your opinion

Certain
people
believe that the appropriate way to improve
population
health
is by adding more stadiums.
Although
, others trust that it has a small impact on public
health
and alternative strategies are needed.
This
essay argues that, even though a good number of
people
will be motivated to do
exercise
, a bigger percentage of individuals are too busy at their
work places
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thus
no
time
allocated for practice and by
this
new actions should be put in place. On one hand, improving
people
's
health
by having more
sport
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sports
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facilities is beneficial,
that is
a large group of
people
will be encouraged to do physical
exercise
.
That is
, due to many free
equipments
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types of equipment
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accessible in stadiums and trainers who charge less training cost compared to gym sessions, they are motivated to do more and by
this
,
population
health
is improved.
For example
, in Kenya, stadiums have been constructed in every county and
this
has recorded more
people
practicing
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there,
thus
statistics from
hospital
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the hospital
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says that the number of
heart related
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cases has dropped .
However
, it is advisable to have more options when dealing with
population
health
.
On the other hand
, other measures should be put under consideration because of the busy schedule of
working
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the working
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population
in which there is little or no
time
allocated in visiting these facilities,
hence
other actions should be taken. Physical
exercise
is not the only way to improve to improve one's
health
condition because even if you
exercise
everyday
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but you do not observe
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a balance
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balance
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balanced
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diet, it is just but a waste of
time
.
For instance
, all hospitals in Kenya have been equipped by nutritionists and physical
health
providers to give the necessary counselling about the importance of maintaining a healthy body.
Therefore
,
this
has helped many and
people
are now observing
healthy
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lifestyle. In conclusion, the most
fundermental
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fundamental
way of improving public
health
is by having more facilities for sport,
that is
according to some
people
, while others believe that
this
has a little effect
thus
different approaches are needed. Despite
people
being
motivated
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there is very little
time
allocated for
exercise
thus
more measures needed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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