Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required . Discuss both this views and give your opinion
Certain
people
believe that the appropriate way to improve population
health
is by adding more stadiums. Although
, others trust that it has a small impact on public health
and alternative strategies are needed. This
essay argues that, even though a good number of people
will be motivated to do exercise
, a bigger percentage of individuals are too busy at their work places
Correct your spelling
workplaces
thus
no time
allocated for practice and by this
new actions should be put in place.
On one hand, improving people
's health
by having more sport
facilities is beneficial, Change the noun form
sports
that is
a large group of people
will be encouraged to do physical exercise
. That is
, due to many free equipments
accessible in stadiums and trainers who charge less training cost compared to gym sessions, they are motivated to do more and by Change the wording
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
this
, population
health
is improved. For example
, in Kenya, stadiums have been constructed in every county and this
has recorded more people
practicing
there, Change the spelling
practising
thus
statistics from hospital
says that the number of Add an article
the hospital
heart related
cases has dropped . Add a hyphen
heart-related
However
, it is advisable to have more options when dealing with population
health
.
On the other hand
, other measures should be put under consideration because of the busy schedule of working
Add an article
the working
population
in which there is little or no time
allocated in visiting these facilities, hence
other actions should be taken. Physical exercise
is not the only way to improve to improve one's health
condition because even if you exercise
everyday
but you do not observe Replace the word
every day
Correct article usage
a balance
balance
diet, it is just but a waste of Correct your spelling
balanced
time
. For instance
, all hospitals in Kenya have been equipped by nutritionists and physical health
providers to give the necessary counselling about the importance of maintaining a healthy body. Therefore
, this
has helped many and people
are now observing healthy
lifestyle.
In conclusion, the most Add an article
a healthy
fundermental
way of improving public Correct your spelling
fundamental
health
is by having more facilities for sport, that is
according to some people
, while others believe that this
has a little effect thus
different approaches are needed. Despite people
being motivated
there is very little Add a comma
,motivated
time
allocated for exercise
thus
more measures needed.Submitted by ednestahshabani on
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