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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

#countries #weight #people #levels #health #fitness #measures
The median of
weight
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the weight
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 of
people
 is growing while
theiw
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their
the
 standards of
health
 and
fitness
 are delining in few countries around the world.
This
 essay will explain the causes why
this
 is happening and put forward several solutions for these issues. One of the major
issue
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issues
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 of
this
 is minimal physical
activity
throught
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through
throughout
 the
day
. While
,
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people
 used to spend almost 70
percent
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per cent
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 of
day
 time in front of computers and mobile, they do not perform any
fitness
activity
 for
health
maintainence
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maintenance
. According to the research
publish
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 by King Edward Medical College, more than 65
percent
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per cent
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people
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of people
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 do not perform any
day
 to
day
activity
 for
health
. Another issue of
this
 is the intake of unhealthy and
unhigenic
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unhygienic
food
 on daily basis. Working professionals used to eat fast
food
 like burgers and other
unheginc
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unhygienic
food
 which in result
effect
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affect
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 on their
health
.
First
 of all, In order to reduce and maintain the
weight
people
 should starting doing
a physical
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physical activities
a physical activity
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activities
 like, running, jogging, gym or cycling. Without these
activities
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,activities
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 no one can reduce the
weight
 and stay healthy.
Although
, going to
gym
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the gym
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 or park for jogging as a working professional is a bit difficult in terms of time management, but these
activities
 are not
time restricted
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time-restricted
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 and can be done at
anytime
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any time
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 either early morning or late
night
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at night
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 before going to bed.
Second
 of all, everyone must change their eating habits. Starts
eaiting
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eating
dating
heigenic
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hygienic
home made
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homemade
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food
 and fruits rather than having junk
food
. In conclusion, no
fitness
activity
 and having junk
food
 are the main issues of
weight
 increase but can be taken care of very easily if start
health
fitness
activities
 and taking
heigenic
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hygienic
food
.
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  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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