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Some people say that to overcome traffic problem, underground tunnels should be built. What is your opinion?

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Over the
last
 few decades, traffic congestion has become one of the main issues big cities have to address in the most efficient way. Among the wide variety of possible solutions, many people tend to agree that subterranean channels are essential. Despite the fact there are still some drawbacks with
this
 option, I strongly believe is an effective alternative to deal with overcrowded highways and should be seriously considered by any city which presents important delays in travelling time.
To begin
 with, opponents to building underground tunnels claim that the total investment would be above the available funds of the city council.
Consequently
, tax rates would very likely skyrocket in order to cover the construction costs.
Moreover
, evidence suggests that while roadwork is being held, the vehicular density would become unbearable, boosting frustration and aggressiveness among drivers. Simultaneously, there would be an unavoidable impact on the environment and the risk of rising pollution to unhealthy levels.
On the other hand
, it is impossible to deny that having more options to move across the city would ease the stress on the freeways at peak hours. As a consequence, there would be not only
happiest
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 citizens
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 but
also
 more room for public transport and eco-friendly vehicles on the surface.
Finally
, research has shown that massive construction projects have an enormous impact on unemployment rates and economic welfare. Overall,
although
 building underground tunnels might generate uncomfortable feelings on a fraction of the population during a short period of time, looking at the big picture, the benefits for the whole community are much greater. Especially if local governments make an effort in mitigating possible tax adjustments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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