DOCTORS, NURSED AND TEACHERS MAKE A GREAT CONTRIBUTION TO SOCIETY AND SHOULD BE PAYER MORE THAN ENTERTAINMENT AND SPORTS CELEBRITIES. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE.
Essential services are the backbone of a national system. Employees in
this
field bring enormous effort to the community as compare
to the superstars in show biz and sports Change the form of the verb
compared
thus
need to be compensated better. I strongly agree with the statement as
a better salary will help employees to remain focused with a higher probability of retention in jobs. Change preposition
that
This
essay shall discuss the reasons with relevant examples why I am holding
Wrong verb form
hold
this
view.
Initially
, Medical and Education staff are working round the clock to help society so should be paid more while
the people working in entertainment and sports are merely entertaining the public. A satisfied mind brings happiness which strives the workforce to deliver a high level of output without any distraction towards financial needs. For example
, if scientists have fatty pay and perks which are fulfilling their needs so
they can be more focused on their jobs without any hindrance. Correct word choice
apply
Therefore
, the
sound financial condition will enhance the focus on work.
Correct article usage
a
Moreover
, to achieve the best from the staff working in emergency services and education sector experience is the key to success. An employee will not leave the job and as they remain in the field will have a better understanding of the system, norms and mission if they were well compensated more than the industry norms. For instance
, Professors in universities are provided with all the facilities like comprehensive medical coverage, free
education for their children in order to retain them. Correct word choice
and free
Hence
, priority should be given to the people working tirelessly to serve the nation in their thankless jobs.
In conclusion, although
every profession has its own place due to
the high pressure and intense nature of job
people helping to build society should be compensated more than the other sectors.Correct article usage
the job
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