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It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#workers #workplace #reason
Nowadays, the way a business operates has
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changes
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 drastically. As
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 of the work is
technology driven
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therefore
changes
 happen frequently. If the
employees
 are unable to adapt to
such
 new circumstances, they would eventually be laid off since they would not be able to add up to the organisation’s growth.
To begin
 with, at earlier times people used to carry out tasks manually which resulted in more time and money consumption.
However
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 the operations are undertaken through technology, machines, artificial intelligence and much more.
As a result
 of which the workers have to be updated with those various innovations. The younger generation is able to adapt to
such
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 time without putting
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 efforts whereas the long term
employees
, at times, face difficulties in getting used to those
changes
.
Therefore
, the companies prefer young
employees
 over
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older ones.
For instance
, a job which involves working in distinct circumstances and includes a lot of
traveling
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 would be more suitable for a young employee as he would have a healthy body and zeal in himself.
On the contrary
, it would be highly unjustified on the part of old aged workers if they
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 just like that. The company should come up with alternatives
such
 as staff training, enhance financial compensation to motivate the
employees
 for taking over to
changes
.
Moreover
, if a company has just the younger
employees
then
 it would not have someone with huge experience who could guide them through. According to
me
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, the companies should try to maintain balance in their
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 proportion and bring some ideas and initiatives for their old and young
employees
 which would result in
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 benefit of everyone.
Therefore
, I partially agree with the topic. The younger generation is the future of a country and they should be guided in
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 right way by the older
employees
.
On the other hand
, the older generation should try to keep pace with the
changes
 so that they can work hand in hand with the younger
employees
.
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