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Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to economic success.others argue that happiness is a kind of personal feeling and has nothing to do with one's financial status.

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It is irrefutable
ture
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true
sure
 that nowadays it is becoming heated issue whether
happiness
 is related to wealth or not.
meanwhile
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 some might deem that
happiness
connect
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 with
people
 success,
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where as
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whereas
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 others think that it is only a type of
person
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 emotions and nothing more than I will shed some light
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 both views along with my own opinion in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,there are numerous reasons
people
 say
happiness
 is linked with economic growth.
first
 and foremost reason is that in
contemporary
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 era,the price of every
commodiety
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commodity
 is increasing day by day,so ti fulfil their desire they need to get
high
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a high
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 paid job,which enables them to
fulfill
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 their needs and enjoy their
life
 with any worry Apart from
this
,nowadays
people
 want to live update with new fashion , so for it they
also
 need to a big chunk of money to purchase new trendy thinks ,if they do not have money to buy these things
then
 they do not live happy in their
life
.
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contrast
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 ,some
indiviaduals
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individuals
 say that
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joyful
joyfull
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 situation is
only
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personal
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a personal
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 feeling of a person
beacuse
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because
 they deem that
people
also
 can be live happy during
time
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 spent with their friends, family and relatives
this
 is because they can get relief .when they share their feeling with their know
one's
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.
Besides
this
,
their
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 are plenty of
people
 who have not
luxury
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a luxury
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lifestyle
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life style
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 but
their
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 are enjoy their
life
 more than other
people
 who have
richest
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 in the world,to set a precedent
last
 year a
survay
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survey
 was conducted by my nation in which
people
 saw astonished result poor class
people
 live
more happy
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happier
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 as
compered
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compared
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 to upper classes. Hammering the
last
 nail,according to me
happiness
us
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 depend upon a situation
beacuse
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because
 if a person
fulfill
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their basic needs without economic success
then
 they can live happy with wealth but if they do not enable to get basic things
then
 they cannot
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