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Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 they will choose the best option as they feel confident about their ability levels and academics records. Here the main key problems are the way student is gaining
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power and understanding the content of the topic is not up to the mark and ,
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 most of the
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 are going by book wisdom only but not by any practical skills and projects. on another ,
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 of the course in the universities as the course curriculum are not up to date and pushing the
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 to do more assignments in the form of writings which may cause stop thinking of a logical way,
students
 entering into the market without any familiarity for their stable position.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate job placement
  • current job market trends
  • practical experience
  • job openings
  • employment prospects
  • geographical barriers
  • automation and technological advances
  • economic conditions
  • mismatch between education and job market demands
  • over-saturation
  • theoretical knowledge
  • competitive job market
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