Write about the following topic: A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The charts show the attendance at entertainment

venues

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and illustrate the entry prices to those

venues

in the year 2009. Overall, the attendance for the most popular event was the most popular which is even higher than the sum of the other two

venues

However

, the price for entry is not completely consistent with it in that year. For the attendance at leisure

venues

, cinemas got the highest participation with more than 1000 thousand admissions, which is two and a half more than the theme parks that comes

second

with approximately 400 thousand, and around 5 times of sports event where the admissions

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less than 200 thousand. For the price of admission, most of the

cost

were

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set inversely with the popularity of the

attendence

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attendance

, where the

cost

for cinema is around 15 for each person and 55 for a four-person family ticket; and the

cost

for

theme

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the theme

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park is 70 per person and 210 for 4 people.

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, the

cost

for

basketball

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a basketball

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game that included

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admission

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the admission

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of sport is around 34 per person, almost halved of the price of theme parks'.

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Topic Vocabulary:

material possessions
social status
old-fashioned values
honour
kindness
trust
societal norms
social media platforms
value system
material wealth
personal relationships
societal well-being
timeless moral values
value-driven society

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