Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions?

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it is not a good sign as an Older generation looking for
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job
and being competent to the younger generations who are actively looking for the
job
in the global market. one must have good vision and plan about their
life
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so that he or she can have quality
life
even after their retirement, if not they may need to seek for
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financial
help in terms of looking of the full time or
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jobs without having the rest and happy time during their late ages. There could be many factors determining their
job
search in the
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market
One of them is poor financial planning during their young age and they may ignored and did not have good
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visibility
on their future road map and
also
family responsibilities as well which may push them into
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to do the
job
in their retirement ages.
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, the retirement
life
is something to have cool
life
without any
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activites
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activities
and busy schedules,
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most of the older generations did not plan their career and they just simply done with the normal
job
without any future aspirations about their family and kids too. Considering
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all these factors government must educate them on
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of issues,wherein if somebody not focused oriented and
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financial status where they will look for help during their late ages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intergenerational competition
  • Age discrimination
  • Adaptability
  • Hiring practices
  • Workforce diversity
  • Upskilling
  • Lifelong learning
  • Flexible working arrangements
  • Ageism
  • Technological proficiency
  • Productivity concerns
  • Diverse skillsets
  • Legislative protection
  • Employment equity
  • Biases
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