Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In the contemporary era, it is irrefutable that
technology
has completely changed the
world
and our daily life to a significant extent. It is predominantly seen that in the competitive
world
, individuals prefer to
work
at
home
as well as juveniles started studying from
home
because it is readily available at an affordable price
nevertheless
, I entirely support that
technology
has a legion of merit to society but, it has a few darker sides too. There has
a myriad advantages
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which will
be
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explain
this
argument, but the most prominent is that it helped humans to increase their productivity in various aspects of life because adults can accomplish their
work
anywhere in the
world
as well as find their job which
allow
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them for settle their future life
therefore
in today's
world
companies make an immense profit. To cite an example, many
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encourage their employees to
work
from their
home
as they see that person do
work
in a convenient environment and stay with their family members.
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employees give 100% results to the company.
Besides
this
, learners can
also
do their
work
at
home
not only at their preferred time but
also
at their own pace.
Moreover
, owing to
technology
, audiovisual media help them to understand any topic comprehensively which is beneficial for them in future. To exemplify, in recent times due to global pandemic, students cannot go to their school,
thus
, every school provides distance learning to continue their study by throwing many platforms
such
as Byju and Udemy. Apart from
this
, due to a number of circumstances, individuals are suffering from several health issues like blood pressure, obesity, diabetes which may be caused by
technology
. Despite having better connections, people can use social media apps like WhatsApp, Instagram, when they call another person they lose face to face connection. In conclusion,
although
sometimes citizens face obstacles to using the internet as a lack of better connection, I believe that it is a positive development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • e-learning
  • accessibility
  • inclusive
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