Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In
this
contemporary world,
people
have become possible to travel around the world as they want. A certain proportion of
people
opine that
this
change just accelerates discord between nations, but does not enhance mature understanding.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
opinion because the major purpose that
people
travel abroad is to understand different cultures and
tourists
have less influence on travelled countries.
To begin
with, the
first
reason why I disagree with
this
opinion is that
people
intend to know different cultures, and they do not aim to
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tension or discord between nations. In fact,
tourists
often visit cultural facilities
such
as museums. In Japan, temples and shrines are the most popular tourist attractions. They tend to not only visit
such
places, but
also
they learn the culture and the history behind temples and shrines.
In addition
, another major purpose of visitors who come to Japan is the food which is
also
related to
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deeply. Another reason why I believe international tourism
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cause international friction is that foreign
tourists
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influence on
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of travelled countries. In general,
tourists
stay other countries for
short
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term. Research conducted by the travel agency in Japan reported that the Japanese tend to stay overseas for 3 to 10 days. It is almost impossible to affect other country's politics.
In addition
to
this
, politicians pay more attention to citizens than
people
from overseas.
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, visitors will not have
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to create tension among nations. To conclude, I reiterate my complete disagreement
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this
opinion.
This
is because the biggest purpose of visitors is to understand different cultures, and they do not have
such
power that affects other country's government, since they stay very short term.
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