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The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between mother and father. To what extend you agree or disagree?

#responsibility #children #mother #father
Parenthood is
a
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 greatest feeling in the
world
 that they enjoyed as a parent, but when
children
 born in
family
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the family
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, bring a huge
responsibility
 as a
mother
 and
father
. As per my perspective,
this
 duty must divide into
parent
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the parent
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.
my
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 all point of view let's discuss in
further
 paragraph.
Firstly
, for a survive in the
world
 three things are main and those are food, shelter and money, without it nothing in
this
word
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. In
present
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the present
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 era basic needs
also
 very hard to get as all these needs become expensive, while
mother
become
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 tired to do
work
 in
office
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an office
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 in
whole
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a whole
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 day, if duties shared by
father
, she may provide more time to
children
 equal
responsibility
 develops status in society and
atmosphre
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atmosphere
 and environment to grow for
children
 should be
imprative
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imperative
 for them.
Secondly
, If
father
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the father
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 helps into the
work
 at home to
mother
,
mother
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the mother
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 and
children
bounding
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bonding
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 are become more powerful, because
alone
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the alone
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responsibility
 of
mother
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the mother
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generate
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generates
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 problems like
lack
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a lack
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 of affection. sharing
work
 by
father
 is a huge relief for
mother
 as bust her stress after doing
choes
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chores
 in the office and home. "sharing is carrying"
this
world
 is
moreover
 suitable for
entire
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the entire
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 discussion,
moreover
 divide
house
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housework
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work
 is
also
 shows how a person care about a loveable family
bounding
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bonding
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 is a result of sharing
responsibility
. To conclude, If
wife
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the wife
a wife
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 can support to husband while earning money
than
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then
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as
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apply
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a
father
also
 has
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 to share her
work
. In the present
world
, Both
gender
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genders
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 shines equally so why only
house
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housework
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work
 can be done by only ladies? house
responsibility
also
 must share
by
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my
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partner
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a partner
the partner
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.
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