when new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centres for people to spend their free time. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

In recent years, due to
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many new approaches are taken into account. It is believed, that whenever there is
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development of cities or towns it is essential to build more public
parks
or to bring more amenities regarding
sport
rather than building shopping malls. In my notion,
government
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should construct new towns including public
parks
and
sport
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facilities
. Town planners should give preferences to
parks
, gardens or sports.
First
and foremost, when there is
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of building new city
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parks
and sports should be there because by having public
parks
people
can spend their leisure time with their loved ones.
Furthermore
, they get fresh air since it is less polluted.
However
, by constructing new
parks
people
come together and can communicate with each other which will enhance social gathering.
Moreover
, there will be
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of phone. According to
recent
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report, it was stated that adolescents are more involved in social media platforms and they do not get out of it which results
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health
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issue.
Therefore
, more public
parks
should be encouraged.
Secondly
, having
sport
facilities
people
can do daily exercise and they can keep their body fit and healthy.
In addition
,
people
can do swimming and jogging when the facility is available. A
sport
is played in
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so there will be more interaction with
people
and
this
will increase the bond between them.
Nevertheless
, by having
this
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facilities
adults or children will come out from home.
Consequently
, it reduces the usage of phone and watching television.
Finally
,
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planning to have these
facilities
can generate revenue. Not only it is beneficial to
people
but
also
to the government. In spite of the fact that by constructing big ground which involved all sports
facilities
can generate income because many games can be played in future in that city.
By contrast
, shopping malls are not needed since online purchase is tremendously increasing. To summarize, I reiterate that while planning to construct new towns planners should build more public
parks
or
sport
facilities
as it will generate more revenue and make relation closer.
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