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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.

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Nowadays in our society, some
children
 have
obligation
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 only with studies, but
other
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others
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 have to divide the time in study and
work
, maybe to help the family with the budget of the house. Some people believe
that is
 not correct a child makes effort to
work
, but another part of
population
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 is in accord with the idea that
work
 is
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 and can help. In
this
 essay, I will examine those reasons, as well as give my own opinion. All
children
 should be protected and taken care
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 parents and society, as well as, they should be incentivized to learn and nourished, in the end, parents are responsible for the well-being of their kids. The reason why some people do not agree that
children
 could have a paid
work
,
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 is because sometimes the
work
 can be damage
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childhood. They believe
children
 should only play and study, without more responsibilities in their lives. Undoubtedly, that no
children
 must be exposed a forced
work
 with hazards their health or integrality,
consequently
 the rights of
children
 must be respected. But
on the other hand
, the
work
 can be pleasured to
children
 if it made according to needs and specific ages. When
children
work
 in a paid job, they learn about responsibilities, the value of the money and they can be stimulated to think
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 social issues of the world. These benefits help the child grows up and becomes an adult more aware and sensible with real problems.
For instance
, one of the big reasons to have many adults involved in debits, to make end meet is because they do not knowledge about the real value of the money, which could
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on
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the
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childhood.
Hence
, I agree with the idea that healthy paid
work
 can be efficacy for
children
. In conclusion, not overtaking the rights and benefits, kids should be motivated to
work
 to learn more about financial education, for them to put into practice in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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