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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace. With today’s technology this process is happening at a greater rate. Technology is increasingly responsible for unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Technology
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 is boon nowadays and it has some detrimental effects on employment. It is believed that updated technologies have replaced individuals employments. Increasing machinery is the main reason to reduce the job for the people. I completely agree with
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 given statement that unemployment would be the higher rate in future and the reasons for my opinion will be elucidated in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
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 is the major concern for rising unemployment. The
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 and foremost reason is the speedy work process. It means every company are using robots technique to make a product and machines are always faster than human beings. To exemplify, recent research by 'The Hindu' newspaper 80 per cent industries prefer work with heavy machinery due to the fact of fast and better production. Thereby, in the future rate of employment could be decreased by updated
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.
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 to it, machines are always accurate and very little chance that they could be wrong. To explain more, due to the fact of robots companies achieve the task in the
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 attempt and it saves time.
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, according to the Indian media 90 per cent of factories use machines due to the fact of
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time-saving
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money saving
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money-saving
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, with the help of robots workers no need to test again. It has accurate in the very
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 attempt most probably. To conclude, owing to the reason time-saving,accurate and fast work process. I am in favour of that
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 could reduce employment in future.
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