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The number of people working online from home has grown in some countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

#people #home #countries
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Nowadays,
people
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 all over the world have suffered from Covid 19, which make workers move toward online. It has both
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positive and negative things. From now on,
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 would discuss them. On the one hand, there are
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 of benefits through home working.
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 of all, it is
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 known fact that workers who make use of online could work their job,whenever or wherever they are. When they have to contact with foreign
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 partner, they need only a few minutes by
telecomminicating
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telecommunicating
 without
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 of going to abroad, which
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 can
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saving
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 money and time.
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 they get up before the very time of
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, it doesn't matter if they have electronic devices
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 as computer or laptop.
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, as becoming a society
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people
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 need self-isolation, staying at home became a significantly crucial way for prevention of
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.
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, it
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give
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 human beings safety.
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, housing work has some negative factors. I argue it obviously could cause depression and dramatic stress. It's because they just communicate with their coworkers and businessmen
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online. Going
to
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outside regularly and talking with
people
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 directly could make positive energy.
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other words, it could make workers isolated and feel lonely. Working at the workplace could be helpful to make good results in their job.
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, on the
business
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 level, companies might have difficulties in making their
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parters
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partners
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 since sometimes some
organizaions
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organizations
 make successful contracts when they make comfortable atmosphere inviting their dinner party
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.
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, these features could result in
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 of their
business
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. In conclusion, as
i
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 mentioned above, changing into
online
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the online
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 world, it is necessary that
people
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 have to
adopt
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adapt
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the
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 world. For doing it, we should know what kinds of pros and cons working
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online has.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • flexibility
  • commuting
  • work-life balance
  • autonomy
  • productivity
  • focus
  • job opportunities
  • social interaction
  • isolation
  • boundaries
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • resources
  • support
  • sedentary
  • physically active
  • responsibilities
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