Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making machines aimed at tourists, other people believes that it is the only way to save such traditions in the world today. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by some that

culture

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heritages

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will be damaged essentially when aimed at making a profit from

tourists

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, while others hold a perspective that human beings’ many cultural

traditions

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can be protected and

reserved

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only through

commercialization

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. I would

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that both views are reasonable but one-sided. It is understandable that many people insist that cultural

traditions

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can benefits from

commercialization

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, after all,

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might bring an area or a government much more money, which will be beneficial to not only the development of an area’s economy but

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the protection of cultural

traditions

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. Precisely, when a government is conducting a cultural programme, the place under its administration will be packed with an increasing number of

tourists

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. The fact that these people go about their daily business, leisure and recreational activities,

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as shopping, diet and so on, would increase relevant institutions’ incomes, including hotels, restaurants and so forth, and

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rise

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the government’s revenue. With adequate money, a richer authority can contribute more to the protection and spread of cultural conventions.

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commercialization

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can

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cause some negative impacts on our cultural

traditions

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. The excessive purpose of money-making may force some cultural

heritages

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to lose their own nature. It is not rare to see on

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basis that some scenic spots carry out cultural activities for the reservation of some folk arts,

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as folk dances ritual activities and folk music, but really for making a profit. In general, after visiting or

traveling

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, many

tourists

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only buy a variety of souvenirs

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of getting

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understanding of the historical background and forms of the traditional arts. It seems that attaching cultural

traditions

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with

commercialization

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cannot necessarily increase the public’s knowledge about these

traditions

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themselves. In my opinion, even though some negative results might be led by people’s main purpose of utilizing cultural

traditions

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to earn money, considering the fact that those invaluable

heritages

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are getting extinct and those needs to be preserved, it is not an offence to get some earnings from the

tourists

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who are enthusiastic to learn about the cultural aspects. But

commercialization

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should not be seen as

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access to the reservation of the

heritages

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since some cultural conventions can be encouraged by education and public promotion.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

373 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Cultural commodification
Authenticity
Economic gain
Cultural significance
Preservation
Cultural homogenization
Financial resources
Cultural heritage
Cultural pride
Tourist interest

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Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed when they are used as money-making machines aimed at tourists, other people believes that it is the only way to save such traditions in the world today. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?