Some parents believe that cell phones are harmful to children while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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society, these days, feels that
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is the need of the hour for students while an equally strong opposing lobby is of the opinion that cell
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have many adverse effects and
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should be restricted from children. I reckon that
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problem has to be judiciously addressed and there cannot be a
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solution to it. Over the past decade, the use of cell
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has
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predominantly
shifted to surfing the internet for all sorts of study related material either for
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project work or for
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assignments.
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exposure is quite helpful in making the younger generation technology savy and being at
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with the rest of the world. Due to the pandemic situation, most of the schools over the past
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year, are operational online. Not only the classes and homework but
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many more academic activities like debates, discussions, competitions etc. have now shifted to an online platform. In the current pandemic
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there is a remote possibility of any changes happening in near future.
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makes the usage of mobile phone
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mandatory. On the flip side, students gain access to a lot of forbidden information and sites on the internet. If left unsupervised, most of them are often caught playing online games. Schools have
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shifted to classes on zoom for more than five hours a day with very
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break time in-between.
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to the screen has escalated problems like eyesight issues, mood swings, behavioural problems, stress and
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issues in youngsters.
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, the number of children visiting pediatric OPD over the
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year due to
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issues and eyesight concerns has gone up drastically. Lack of physical exercise and long sitting hours have added more fuel to the fire. To conclude, I would like to highlight, that the usage of mobile
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can be classified as a necessary evil. Parents have to play the role of
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and monitory the content and duration of phone usage by their offsprings every day.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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