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Task 2: Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities.

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These days the information
technology
 is being
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indispensable to citizens in the world. There are
a
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various pros and cons with regard to the phenomenon, which I will discuss now. One of the obvious drawbacks of dependence on
technology
 is that people have
health
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 problem.
This
 is because it can be extremely time-consuming especial
the
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 internet is overused for their working, studying and entertainment on a daily basis. As a consequence, it makes a profound impact on their health as well as body.
For instance
, the decreased eyesight is one of the most prevalent condition
as well as the lack of activities
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 make our body detrimental. A related criticism is that youngsters who are becoming reliant on
technology
 are distracted from their studying largely
as a result
 of concentrating too much on internet activities.
On the other hand
, there are several benefits to using
technology
. One indisputable merit is that it is more convenient and faster. Because of the fact that there is plenty of invaluable resources for studying and work.
For example
, it is easily accessible to research any information or knowledge
that is
 unfamiliar in an instant. Another advantage is that the general population is able to connect with each other if we are desirable we will have conservation.
Also
, it assists us in entertainment especially we are possible to make a choice how we relax
such
 as play games, watch movies, read a
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 book and so on. Overall, there are arguments for and against the idea of using information
technology
 on a regular basis. The important thing is that if it is used appropriately in human life, it will be useful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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