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In many countries, people like to eat a wider variety of food than can be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food people eat today has to come from other regions. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages.

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Nowadays,
people
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 are trying hard to develop their livings in tons of ways and they have both positive and negative ones,
such
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 as using imported
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 more than local fare. It gets many reasons to do that and for those ,reasons we still have ways to solve. The
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 reason must be by the style they live
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 In developing countries, the crowd are biased towards foreign products and no expectation for foodstuff either. Society chase to be looked at more prosperously because exotic cuisine usually costs more. It caused by their way of living to enhance the bearings but not for the inside values.
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, despite the fact that imported meal is expensive, they are worthy of the spent money. It not only because of their taste and flavours, but
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 their freshness and qualities. The
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 reason is local foods is the things that
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 in the country see and taste every
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.
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, locals find it more interesting and trendy to purchase imported
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 and try new thing. To encourage the nation to prefer local cuisine to foreign
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, from my point of view, the government should increase the imported fare taxes. The more taxes they increase, the more money we can get from foreign companies and the less local
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 is neglected. Dealing with the way
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 chasing foreign stuff, we can
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 discuss and broaden their knowledge about how important it could be to buy local
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. As we buy our
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, we are gaining and maintaining the traditional and symbolic things of our country.
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, it will attract more foreign tourists to visit us and in that way, our country’s economy will raising up
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 by
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, the local shops should try to develop their
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 by trying a new style of cooking and decorating
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 or marketing differently and attractively. If they can do their job better and tastier, it will be more and more
people
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 finding and tasting the local
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. All in all, there are many ways we can do to make
people
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 choose domestic
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 rather than exotic
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People
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 are growing up every
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, and their lifestyles, their demands change quickly. On that account, the best solution we can do to solve
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 chasing-foreign stuffs problem is enhancing and improving our local
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