Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

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have different views about whether university
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can be allowed to choose
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they like. While some arguments about majoring in useful
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, I believe that they should be able to study all kinds of courses that they want. On the one hand, it can not deny the important functions of forcing
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to choose useful
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as mathematics, chemistry, computer science and so on. It is obvious that studying these curricula can be beneficial especially when
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tend to look for job opportunities, because the technology
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a lot of economic prosperity , which make induces
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to who study
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concerning science and technology will
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increasing much more chances to be recruited,
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, it
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a road straight to a guaranteed
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.
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, not only can individuals can gain from that, but society can
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get profits. More scientists and engineers mean society can develop at a faster pace, meanwhile, they can transport new inventions and economic growth that lead to
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wealth.
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, being free to choose fond
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students
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are fond of is more important than having
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on choice in my opinion.
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, so-called useful
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are not necessarily useful for one's
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, particularly for those
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who are not interested in science, lack of interests in the
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the with distraction in
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, failures of relevant tests,
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they will cause an unpromising
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, nobody can precisely predict what will be useful in the
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. Even though choosing a practical subject currently, it will
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not be useful still in 15 years. In conclusion,
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it might seem sensible for universities to focus only on the most useful
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, I personally prefer the current system in which
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have a right to study whatever they like.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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