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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source
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Reading
news
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 on the
internet
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 is becoming more popular in
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 era.
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 many people nowadays read
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 from the
internet
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 some believe that still, newspapers will remain the prominent
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 . I completely disagree and I believe that the
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 is the most important
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 of
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, I believe that
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Internet
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 keeps updating the
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In
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24 hours,
that's
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 why
its
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more
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 important
source
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 than newspapers and people like to stick with updated
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 which is not possible in the newspaper. When someone reads the magazine he or she only gets the
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 about yesterday
while
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internet
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news
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 can be updated in real-time and that's why important
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first
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 broadcast or
publish
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 on the
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 rather than in a tabloid.
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, recently, I always check the
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 for important
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 regarding covid-19 virus because research on
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the
 virus keep updated and tabloid takes time to publish. In short,
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Internet
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 has the ability to update any
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 in real-time, that's why I believe it's the most prominent
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 of
news
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.
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, Many authenticated
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 companies post their
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 on
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portal
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 where newspaper the
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 might not be true which become the
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internet
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 most important
for
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a
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news
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source
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, CNN does not publish any newspaper but
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his
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website on the
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 with main and prominent
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 and the whole world
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CNN when it comes to
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. authentication makes any
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 more important. In conclusion, the above data, I strongly believe that the
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 is the most important
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for
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news
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 because it can keep updating in real-time and
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 authentic for
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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