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Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities. Such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Few
people
 trust that the
effecient
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efficient
 way to stay healthy is to get into a
gym
 or
club
.
However
,others believe in performing
day
 to
day
 routines like walking and avoiding lifts is sufficient.
This
 essay discusses both views and in my
opinion
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 I believe that doing household activities is enough to burn calories.
To begin
 with, in
this
 contemporary world,most of the
people
's work does not hold any physical activity due to the technology advancements.so
people
 opted for
gym
's as an alternative,because it makes them to workout in fixed timings.The
people
 who
does
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do
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 not like
gym
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the gym
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,
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apply
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takes
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take
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 membership in
health
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the health
a health
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club
,where they provide calorie less food to
club
 members and
also
 makes them participate in physical exercises in the form of yoga or any regular stretches.
On the other hand
,there are others who
does
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do
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 not belong to
this
 category.
This
 kind of
people
 does not show any
intersest
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interest
 in
gym
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the gym
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 or
health
 clubs because they believe there is no need
of
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for
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separate
seperate
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a seperate
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 slot for doing physical activities.
Instead
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,Instead
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 these
people
 believe in
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losing
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loosing
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losing
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 calories by performing everyday routines.
For instance
,If the office is
in
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on
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premises
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the premises
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,they walk and catch public transport
instead
 of going in their own private vehicles.These
people
 do any household works like cooking,cleaning the house on
theor
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their
 own
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in order
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inorder
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in order
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 to burn calories and be
helathy
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healthy
.They avoid lifts and climb stairs especially during office hours so that they avoid
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of being sitting for long hours,and
also
 these
people
 think that joining in
gym
 and
health
 clubs involve money and some
people
cant
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can't
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 afford it. To conclude,
There
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there
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 are several ways for being
helathy
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healthy
,
Firstly
, by joining in
gym
 or
health
club
 ,
secondly
 by performing
day
 to
day
 tasks.
However
in
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,in
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 my opinion,
i
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I
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 believe doing daily activities in our life is not only the best way but
also
 beneficial.
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