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People should follow the customs and tradition when people start to live in a new. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every
country
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 and region have their own
customs
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 and
traditions
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 . At the present time
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everyone's
life
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 is getting very busy and advance.
People
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 want to move
at
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to
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 different places for so many different purposes. I am going to explain my views in
following
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the following
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Firstly
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advance
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world
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,world
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people
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 visit and permanently moved to different countries and states .Some went to different places to get jobs and others going for study purpose.I think they should follow
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customs
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the customs
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 and
traditions
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 of
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country
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the country
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 where they moved and
also
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 still follow
there
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their
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 own
traditions
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 because it is important from my point of view
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for instance
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they
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apply
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when they move to another region and they don't follow
there
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their
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customs
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 they look different and awkward in their culture.
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Moreover
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 if they follow
there
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their
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traditions
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life
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 would be easy for them
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 they can enjoy their
life
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 in
better
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a better
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 way .
people
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 easily mix up with others .
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 the
country
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 they moving they celebrate different festivals than
thry
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they
 celebrate in their own
country
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 they should celebrate all festivals and enjoy their
life
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. If they don't follow that
customs
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 they feel alone. To conclude
people
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 should follow the
traditions
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 and
customs
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 where they live in its very necessary to enjoy the
life
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 in
good
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 way and
also
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 chance to get knowledge about others culture.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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