People should follow the customs and tradition when people start to live in a new. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every
country
and region have their own
customs
and
traditions
. At the present time
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everyone's
life
is getting very busy and advance.
People
want to move
at
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to
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different places for so many different purposes. I am going to explain my views in
following
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the following
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paragraphs.
Firstly
In the
advance
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world
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,world
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people
visit and permanently moved to different countries and states .Some went to different places to get jobs and others going for study purpose.I think they should follow
customs
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the customs
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and
traditions
of
country
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the country
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where they moved and
also
still follow
there
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their
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own
traditions
because it is important from my point of view
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, for instance,
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for instance
they
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apply
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when they move to another region and they don't follow
there
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customs
they look different and awkward in their culture.
Moreover
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if they follow
there
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their
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traditions
life
would be easy for them
also
they can enjoy their
life
in
better
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a better
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way .
people
easily mix up with others .
For example
the
country
they moving they celebrate different festivals than
thry
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they
celebrate in their own
country
they should celebrate all festivals and enjoy their
life
. If they don't follow that
customs
they feel alone. To conclude
people
should follow the
traditions
and
customs
where they live in its very necessary to enjoy the
life
in
good
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way and
also
chance to get knowledge about others culture.
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