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In many parts of the world, illiteracy rates are still high. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Education
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 is a fundamental right of every citizen.
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illiteracy
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 including the dominance of a patriarchal society and poor economical background.
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 suggest
solutions
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 to tackle
illiteracy
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 like free girls’
education
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 as well as night schooling for young youth.
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, there are numbers of causes of
illiteracy
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 in developing countries. One of them is the presence of male dominating societies. Women are considered homemakers and
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 they are deprived of
education
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 in many societies.
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- in India male
education
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 is considered a priority since they are called breadwinners of the family. The discrimination in the
education
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 between a girl and a boy child results in high rates of
illiteracy
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.
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, most of the families in developing countries are from
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 background.
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 led young children towards child labour. Being uneducated these children often perform under-skilled works and unable to receive a higher pay scale. As per the research conducted by UNESCO, in, India 60% of children are working underpaid due to a lack of skills and
education
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. There are a couple of
solutions
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 to increase the literacy rate. One of them is the organisation of free
education
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 in collaboration with the NGOs for a girl child.
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 will help to educate girls living in
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rural area where resources are minimal.
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, the government should open night schools for the young youth to help to complete their
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. Due
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 ,schooling young people would earn during day-time while completing their
education
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 during night-time. The above-suggested
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 would help the world to increase the literacy rate. To sum up,
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 to increase the literacy rate in many parts of the world.
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