It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Every child
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a
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some kind of talents
such
as singing or playing sports by their birth and other are gain skills day by day with new experiences. So every child
get
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some talents if they have
interest
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.
This
essay going to discuss both views and my opinion in
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To begin
with
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Some young
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children
childrens
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children
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are born like
a superstars
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in different fields
such
as
music
or indoor and outdoor games . They get
this
talent
from
there
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parents
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for instance
some kids
are become
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good
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singer because they get knowledge about
music
from their childhood
such
as they saw their parents how they sing or how they practice for their
music
and songs
also
which
music
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instrument they use. On
the
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apply
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another
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side
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some other
child
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children
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need
training
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to become
a
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apply
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good
sport
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sports
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person and musician or to get another
talent
.They need to spend time and
hardwork
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hard work
to get
these
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experience.In my
opinion
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any kid
become
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becomes
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a good professional in any field what they want
for example
one little one want to become a cricketer he
dont
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don't
have
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any at home to teach him
then
he
need
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to go out and spend money to learn some skills about cricket when he
spend
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money defiantly he
learn
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more and
also
know the value about the money. To conclude Many kids are talented by birth
such
as they have
this
talent
heritage on
the
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apply
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another
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other
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hand other children gain that experience
by
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their
hardwork
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hard work
. according to
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my
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me
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youngers should get
talent
by
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from
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their experiences .
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