It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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person and musician or to get another

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one little one want to become a cricketer he

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money defiantly he

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know the value about the money. To conclude Many kids are talented by birth

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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257 words

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innate talent
predisposition
natural ability
child prodigies
excel
dedication
proper training
nurtured
aptitude
sustained effort
perseverance
long-term success
mastery
passion
initial boost
inherent ability
rigorous training
exceptionally skilled

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