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Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

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It has been seen a tendency that older
people
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 struggle to get a
job
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 as it has been getting more competitive among both, young and old
people
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 to get a
job
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 nowadays. I am of the opinion that
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 trend will result in for older potential workers to suffer in their lives a lot more, that said,
companies
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 could set some regulations in regards to employment procedures.
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, the fact that older
job
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 seekers have to compete with young stars for the same jobs means that there is a chance for older
people
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 not to acquire jobs easily as it usually is cheaper for
companies
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 to hire youth, rather than experienced
people
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.
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,
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 fact will cause serious problems. In general, it is more likely that
people
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 who are in their 30s, 40s and 50s have started families unlike young
people
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 in their 10s or 20s. So if these
job
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 seekers who are older and have family and children cannot work
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 of
companies
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 preferring younger generations for cost-cut, they are in
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 chance of struggling to live and raise their children, which
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 result in
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 economy as these
people
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 will not be able to spend money as much. To tackle these possible problems, organizations can set a rubric in regards
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 employment procedure.
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, they can place certain numbers how many they can employ certain ages, like 2 new graduates and 5
people
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 having more than 10 years of experience in that role.
Companies
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 can benefit from hiring older
people
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 because they are usually more experienced in their life so will be able to contribute their knowledge and experience to their company. In conclusion, these days, more and more older generations have to compete with young potential workers for the same jobs.
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 leads to
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 chance for them to suffer financially if they cannot get a
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 and
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 affect the nation’s economy as they will be tight on cash.
Companies
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 should be responsible to avoid these possible problems by introducing some regulations,
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 as setting up
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 of employees they can hire for each age group. Organizations will definitely benefit from older and experienced workers who
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 more knowledge to contribute.
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