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Nowadays many jobs are more stressful and the working day is longer. What are the reasons for this? What can employers do to help employees?

#jobs #employers #employees
The line graph illustrates information about the number of people without a job in the United
States
 and Great
Britain
 in the
year
 2008 and 2015. Overall, from the graph , it is clear that the United
States
 showed growth, while
Britain
 remained stable.
However
, both countries experienced some fluctuation in those seven years. In 2008, Unites
States
 started with a percentage of 5%.
Then
 it climbed rapidly to almost 10% in 2010. From here, the rate of unemployed people plummet gradually and reached 8% in 2013, at the same rate as
Britain
. In the final
year
, the percentage dropped considerably to just under 6%.
Britain
 started with the same amount as the United
States
 in the
first
year
.
Then
 it increased sharply to approximately 8% in 2010.
This
 remained stable for one
year
 and jumped slightly to just over 8% in 2012 by crossing the US rate. In 2015, it decreased to about 5,5%.
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