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Nowadays many jobs are more stressful and the working day is longer. What are the reasons for this? What can employers do to help employees?

#jobs #employers #employees
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The line graph illustrates information about the number of people without a job in the United
States
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 and Great
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 in the
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 2008 and 2015. Overall, from the graph , it is clear that the United
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 showed growth, while
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 remained stable.
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, both countries experienced some fluctuation in those seven years. In 2008, Unites
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 started with a percentage of 5%.
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 it climbed rapidly to almost 10% in 2010. From here, the rate of unemployed people plummet gradually and reached 8% in 2013, at the same rate as
Britain
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. In the final
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, the percentage dropped considerably to just under 6%.
Britain
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 started with the same amount as the United
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 it increased sharply to approximately 8% in 2010.
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 and jumped slightly to just over 8% in 2012 by crossing the US rate. In 2015, it decreased to about 5,5%.
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