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All parent want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a child’s future. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion

#parent #opportunities #children #people #schools #skills #range #subjects #child’s #future
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 of our country. It is
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skills
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opponents
 argue that by having
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 of
subjects
 is better for youngsters future. In my
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skills
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impotant
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important
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schools
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skills
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a student
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 can easily find what they are
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 in their early stage so they can concentrate on their
skills
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 2005 a survey shows that the
schools
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skills
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illustrate
illustrated
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talented
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schools
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Furthermore
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skills
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children
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also
 kids have so many
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, in
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 which will conclude to major serious issues. On the
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schools
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 of other
subjects
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For example
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schools
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 mathematics and
also
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 moral science which will lead
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.
Moreover
, by adding these
subjects
 youngsters will have more values in their daily life which will lead to better future. To sum up, In my
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skills
 are more important as
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 are
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 of
subjects
 already in youngsters life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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