All parent want the best opportunities for their children. There are some people who think that schools should teach children skills but others think having a range of subjects is better for a child’s future. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion

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of our country. It is
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whereas,
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opponents
argue that by having
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of
subjects
is better for youngsters future. In my
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skills
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impotant
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important
thing where
schools
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thing to learn in childhood as
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a student
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can easily find what they are
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in their early stage so they can concentrate on their
skills
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2005 a survey shows that the
schools
teaching
skills
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illustrate
illustrated
more
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talented
talents
students as compare to other
schools
.
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skills
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children
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and
also
kids have so many
subjects
these days if more
subjects
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then
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will be more headache and pressure on
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, in
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which will conclude to major serious issues. On the
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hand, some parents think that
schools
should include
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of other
subjects
for
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of
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their kids.
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schools
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mathematics and
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moral science which will lead
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.
Moreover
, by adding these
subjects
youngsters will have more values in their daily life which will lead to better future. To sum up, In my
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skills
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subjects
already in youngsters life.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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