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Band 5.5

It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving more important than spending in today’s world?

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Nowadays, the economy was declined significantly in the stage of the covid-19 epidemic so we are faced with the income. It seems to me that saving
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 is a judicious decision and I will explain the reasons in
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, saving income is the best defensive
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 is due to the fact that it is able to assist us to deal with our challenges in the future.
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, people may face
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unpredictable phenomenon
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 as unemployment, diseases and other crises in a certain stage of life.
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, if citizens have the amount of
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 will handle these situations. A
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 argument is that it appears to be true that if we spend
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 appropriately our life will be more standard.
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, people who are willing to save their sums are a good discipline. Because of the fact that those who tend to make a plan and go the extra miles to reach aims.
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, it is to be true that saving income is one of the ways which assist our enormous purchases
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 as cars, houses, poverties and so on.
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, it is surely the savers who are a wise as well as wide viewpoint to widen our opportunities. An example can be that if we have the
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 available we will be able to invest in a wide range of fields. For
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 reason, we may make more sums and develop ourselves. Of course, those who say that people should spend
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 needs, interesting to be pleasure are quite correct. Despite
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, it seems that it is not a judicious outlook. To sum up, I believe that sensible saving is a wise choice to tackle obstacles during
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times of uncertainty, which is prevalent these days.
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