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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in businesses, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we he more auspicious of their benefits?

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Technology has taken over the world in
this
 new era, most of the daily
activities
 people perform nowadays are systematized and controlled by a computer. The advantages that
computers
has
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 brought to individuals and companies are numerous.
However
, to what extend
computers
 will control our lives in
a
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 near future ? What consequences we should expect if the disadvantages of its
excesive
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excessive
 use
outweight
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outweigh
 the benefits?
First
 of
all
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 it is
neccesary
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necessary
 to highlight the huge steps humankind has been able to achieve thanks to the development of new
computarized
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computerized
 technologies from the exploration of
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space to
the
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simple day to day
activities
 like purchasing, paying, cooking, etc.
Computers
 play a significant role in our lives.
For example
 facial and voice
recognizion
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recognition
that
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allows
to
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us to
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acces
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access
 to our bank accounts, to our homes or jobs to name a few.
Certainly
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computers
 will change the way people travel today, in
a
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near future
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 individuals might not require to have a paper passport in order to move around the world, all the information will be
controled
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controlled
 and secured by
computers
 without a doubt. On the other side, despite
computers
 are here to ease the way we live and make our processes more efficient, it is necessary to be aware of what
activities
computers
 can not replace namely intrinsic aspects of human pshyquis that are developed by interacting with others
such
is
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as
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 the case of babies, toddlers and kids
whom
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develope
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develop
developed
 their sense of belonging
throught
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through
throughout
 the contact with their parents or guardians.
Computers
 might ease our lives but society should pay attention to not delegate
such
 important
activities
 to a machine. To conclude, technologies and
computers
allows
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 that society and humankind
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advance with giant steps.
However
, people should be aware of the
activities
 that might not
be replace
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 by a computer
such
the
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 human touch, that way we will
be only benefit
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only benefit
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 and not
predjudice
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prejudice
 at the same time.
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