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Governments and big companies should work together to reverse environmental damage, rather than making individuals responsible for that. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #companies #work #damage #individuals
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Concerns about the detriment of the
enviroment
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environment
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 the
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 debate these days, big manufacturers and fabrics are pointed out as the main polluters.
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, the sum of all the actions taken by single individuals
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 factories
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 a great impact on the contamination of the planet. As big entities and direct influencers on consumers behaviour, governments and enterprises should set and achieves standards and policies that contribute to minimize practices that impact negatively
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our planet and enforce people to reduce their ecological footprint Government and multinational industries have the power and the resources to invest in research of new methods and technology that lessen the environmental damage
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 they
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excel
 great influence on people's way of living and behaviour. Giant companies
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 as Amazon, Ikea, Walmart among others have implemented policies that
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 the reduction and usage of plastic and utilize
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minimum
 packaging as possible,
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 measures educates and encourage their clientele to adapt and adopt
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 good practices. On the other side, people's day to day actions have great
repercutions
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repercussions
 on our environment, it is
crutial
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crucial
critical
 that governments
stablish
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establish
 control measures over companies that promote
consumist
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consumer
consumerist
 conducts as well as it should strictly regulate the uses of natural resources.
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 the percentage of
recicled
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recycled
 paper or water
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 utilized by a company monthly or per year, as well as the amount of plastic utilized by individuals at home. In conclusion, our planet earth is everyone's responsibility and all actions either small or big will have an impact on the environment,
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 why big entities
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Governments
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 should be the main regulator for industries and individuals. Companies at the same time should lead by example to
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 clients
exercing
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exercising
 rules that promote a
concious
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conscious
 utilization of earth's resources.
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