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Many people believe that riding a bicycle is still the way to get to places. What are the advantages and disadvantages to using a bicycle nowadays?

#people #bicycle #places
A large proportion of society still
consider
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 using a
bicycle
 to commute
betweeen
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between
places
.
Although
 it is advantageous as it reduces environmental pollution and our fuel expenditure but
their
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 are minor drawbacks are well. On the one hand, one of the benefits of riding a
bicycle
 to get to
places
 is that it tremendously decreases air pollution due to which environment becomes
more
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cleaner and healthier for human use. The reduction of toxic gases from surroundings help increase human productivity and is extremely helpful for human health.
Secondly
, it decreases our spendings on motor fuel which can now be put
into
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 some good use.
For instance
,
environmental
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the environmental
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 protection movement in
france
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have
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 saved around 40
percent
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 of their money.
Thirdly
, reducing the use of natural resources would be
benificial
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beneficial
 for our future generations. It will help them develop
an
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 vital understanding
on
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of
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 how to manage natural resources and be considerate while using them.
On the other hand
, one problem of using
bicycle
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a bicycle
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 for commute is that it takes more time to reach far off
places
. There is no doubt that
bicycle
are
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is
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 very efficient
with
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in the city, but it is pretty tiring and time
talking
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taking
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 if you want to go
a
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farther place.
Second
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 possible issue can be that it is not physically suitable to ride
alot
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a lot
 of
bicycle
 on daily basis. It would have
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 effect on their health as they get older. In conclusion, while riding a
bicycle
 can have
alot
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a lot
 of benefits, it
also
 leads to people spending more time to reach
places
 and having
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negative
negetive
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 impact on
human
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 body as they get older.
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