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In some countries younger people are increasingly losing interest in teaching. Why is this happening? What can be done to improve the situation? Give reasons for your explanation and include examples from your own experience

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In many nations, youth is no more interesting in the teaching profession. There are a couple of reasons
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 of
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 profession and some adolescents do not respect their
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.
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 essay will discuss its reasons and viable solutions to improve the situation in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 and the foremost reason is less
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 of the teaching profession. Nowadays people show interest in IT companies because these firms provide them with a handsome
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 package.
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, In Europe, it was found that
teachers
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 are getting a
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 lower
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 as compared to other professions.
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, In some places, a peon gets more
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 than a teacher.
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, these days students do not obey their
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 and disrespect them.
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, In my school, a student's father was a rich businessman and he did not respect his
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. There are some possible solutions to improve the situation.
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, the government should increase the
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 of
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 because they do lots of hard work to give valuable knowledge to students.
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, the government should
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 make some law against those pupils who misbehave with their
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. To conclude, many people are not showing interest in teaching because of less remuneration and disrespect by the students. The government should do something for
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 as increase
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 and make laws.
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