Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.

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that teenagers prefer making new
friends
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online to meeting them in person in recent days. Even I agree that it's a good and fast way to make new
friends
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, I believe meeting up in person is
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needed. I think there are several reasons behind
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phonomenan
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phenomenon
.
Firstly
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, it is easy to
intereact
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interact
with
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who are from different
countires
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countries
and far distant
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latest
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social media online. Young
people
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can just download an app
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enables teenagers to chat with
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people
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without doing outside. When they socialise online ,they are able to talk to
people
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who have different
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backgrounds, which is more exciting and has more curiosity for them. Another reason is there are some
people
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who are shy or nervous when they talk to unknown
people
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in person. So for these young
people
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, the Internet and some apps are the best for them to make new
friends
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.
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meeting up with
people
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online is not a bad way, we
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encourage young
people
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to socialise face to face. The government has a responsibility to organize different activities for young
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who have
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similar hobbies and
interets
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interests
., which is safer for both parents and children. And it's a good idea to unite different schools and provide students opportunities to make new
friends
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who are at the same age. Students have
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similar topic to talk which is more interesting and related to their lives. In conclusion, no matter
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teenagers
socialise with their new
friends
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or old
friends
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, having a cup of coffee at the cafe is not a bad choice.
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