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Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.

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The studies
shows
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 that teenagers prefer making new
friends
 online to meeting them in person in recent days. Even I agree that it's a good and fast way to make new
friends
 , I believe meeting up in person is
also
 needed. I think there are several reasons behind
this
phonomenan
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phenomenon
.
Firstly
, it is easy to
intereact
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interact
 with
people
 who are from different
countires
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countries
 and far distant
by
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latest
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 social media online. Young
people
 can just download an app
which
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that
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 enables teenagers to chat with
any
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other
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people
 without doing outside. When they socialise online ,they are able to talk to
people
 who have different
culture
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 backgrounds, which is more exciting and has more curiosity for them. Another reason is there are some
people
 who are shy or nervous when they talk to unknown
people
 in person. So for these young
people
, the Internet and some apps are the best for them to make new
friends
.
Although
 meeting up with
people
 online is not a bad way, we
also
 encourage young
people
 to socialise face to face. The government has a responsibility to organize different activities for young
people
 who have
the
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similar hobbies and
interets
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interests
., which is safer for both parents and children. And it's a good idea to unite different schools and provide students opportunities to make new
friends
 who are at the same age. Students have
the
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 similar topic to talk which is more interesting and related to their lives. In conclusion, no matter
teengers
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teenagers
 socialise with their new
friends
 or old
friends
, having a cup of coffee at the cafe is not a bad choice.
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