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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Parents
 from all over the world remarkedly encourage their
children
's education nowadays as compared to the
last
 few decades.
Therefore
, there is a debatable issue that whether
children
 are more educated if they are in same-gender
schools
 or
schools
 with both genders. In
this
 essay, I will discuss these two views and give my opinion why I think educating in mixed
schools
 is much more favourable. On the one hand, schooling teenagers tend to have dating issues which are nightmares for most
parents
 because
parents
 worry that dating will mess up with their
children
's successful journey of education.
Accordingly
, schooling
children
 in one gender school has become a popular option among these groups of
parents
.
For example
, a recent publication from the University of China claimed that there are some proven results that students from same-gender
schools
 achieved more compared to those same-grade students from different gender
schools
.
On the other hand
, there is a greater positive impact on
children
's social skills if they are going to institutions where there are a mix of boys and girls. To be specific,
children
 learn how to interact with an opposite-
gendergender
Correct your spelling
gender gender
 during group presentation and activities.
As a result
, they will not have any fear or inferiority whenever they communicate with the unknown opposite gender.
This
 will be a great aid for them when they enter the actual working environment after they graduated. To conclude, even though there are certain advantages of education in each of the school, I , personally consider learning in mixed
schools
 as the benefit of great interpersonal relationship is far more outweigh the drawback like dating , which can be manageable with proper parenting.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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