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People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
people
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 buy goods and services almost every day. Some
people
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 insist that
people
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 who belong
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 age groups have different trends of shopping. I strongly agree with
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 because the measure of shopping is different by age and frequency changes as well.
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 reason why I support
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 is that the ways that
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 shop change by generations.
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, the younger generation tends to
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 online shops, while elderly
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 be prone to actual stores.
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 who were born after 1980 are called the "digital native", and they raised with the Internet and related services.
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, seniors hardly
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 e-commerce, since they unwilling to disclose their personal information on the Internet
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, some young
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 not only purchase products from larger shops,
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 as Amazon.com and Rakuten, they
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 buy products from individuals through social networking services. On top of that, another reason why I assume that the shopping habits vary by age groups is that youngsters shop more often than the old generation. In fact, teenagers more likely to buy clothes more frequently. As
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 of inexpensive fashion brands,
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 as H&M, ZARA and UNIQLO, they are able to get these whenever they want.
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, there were fewer options when the old generation was young.
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, they tend to shop less and still
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 the same thing longer. To conclude, I reiterate my complete agreement with the topic.
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 of e-commerce and frequency.
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