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These days, children have easy access to home computers, tablet computers, and smartphones and many spend a large part of their free time using these devices. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
majority
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the majority
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 of
children
 use electronic gadgets
such
 as computers and smartphones. The technology today has become user friendly
therefore
, these
devices
 can be easily used by
children
.
However
, excess usage of these results in adverse effects on them.
This
 essay discusses the pros and cons of these followed by an opinion.
To begin
 with, now the education level has been upgraded to
such
 an extent that
children
 have to be knowledgeable about various kinds of aspects. To fulfil
this
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these
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 criteria, computers or smartphones are the best
option
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options
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. These are resourceful and everything is available
on
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with
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 a click or a tap.
Moreover
, the price of these
devices
 is reasonable. Every kind of person can afford them without much investment.
Furthermore
, when a child is unable to understand certain aspects related to their course they can just search for it on the internet through their
devices
.
Additionally
,
as
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due to covid-19 schools were closed, these
devices
 made it possible to continue the education of
children
.
On the contrary
, the major disadvantage of these
devices
 is that sometimes
children
 use
it
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them
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 for inappropriate content.
Consequently
, they become immoral and nasty. To add on, games on these
devices
 become an addiction of
children
.
Instead
 of using it for useful things they keep on playing games on them. Eventually,
this
 affects their studies as well. According to
me
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my
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,
children
 should be made aware of how and for what kind of things they should use these
devices
. Too much of anything is bad
hence
, a balanced approach must be applied.
Further
, parents should
also
 keep a check on their
children
. To conclude, these
devices
 should be used in a way that
it
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adds value to the
children
.
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