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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion.

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Artificially intelligent
robots
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 have taken place of manpower in most of the workplaces day by day. Though
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 mechanical devices will takeover huge portion of
workforces
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 still, there will be some
jobs
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which
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 will require operations by the human touch or
power
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. Gradually,
robots
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 will
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takeover
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 most of the non-skilled and non-complex human
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 number of companies would prefer to invest one time in a mechanical device to handle their
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workload
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work load
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 rather
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than hiring
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 individual and paying them every month for the same
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The famous
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 companies like the Amazone prefer to have an automated infrastructure and their
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 are performing precisely speedy
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tasks
 compared to human
power
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. Due to these reasons, there are
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 of chances that
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 of
jobs
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 will be performed by
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artificial intelligence .
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, there are some
taskes
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tasks
 which can never be replaced by
robots
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 as it only requires human touch and brain.
Robots
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 will not be able to cope with
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 highly demanding task because
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robot
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 only respond to the things that are programmed in their system. These
jobs
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 include doing experiments, surgeries
erc
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etc
.
Robots
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 will never be able to achieve what has taken social evolution hundreds of thousands of years to achieve. In conclusion, there are
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 of chances that
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 number of
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 will be taken over by
robots
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instead
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 of humans. Unskilled
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workers
work
 will be executed by automated machines
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whereas
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where as
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, skilled
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work
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 will always be done by human
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, there will be few
jobs
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which
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 will still require human execution rather than robotic
power
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • artificial intelligence (AI)
  • automation
  • robotics
  • futuristic developments
  • analyze data
  • analytical precision
  • human capabilities
  • emotional intelligence
  • human interaction
  • human oversight
  • strategic decision-making
  • nuances of human judgment
  • technological landscape
  • intrinsic human qualities
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