any parents (mostly women) decide to stay home and take care of the family members instead of working. Some people suggest that the government should pay them for doing that. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

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parents
generally
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to stay at
home
to look after their children or elderly persons despite having the potential and educational qualifications to
work
. Many people assert that those who sacrifice their careers for the family should get paid by the
government
.
However
, I disagree with
this
opinion as it is an individual's choice to stay at
home
, and it is difficult for the
government
to monitor each family from
this
perception. There are several reasons not to pay those who stay at
home
and take
care
of their family
members
;
first
, individuals choose to prioritize
work
or look after the family. It takes immense pressure handling capabilities of
parents
who take
care
of family
members
and
work
simultaneously. They have to sacrifice their leisure and entertainment time in doing so.
As a result
, their children
also
understand the significance of hard
work
in their growing age. Family
members
also
acknowledge and understand
parents
' efforts, which increases mutual respect and understanding in the family.
Secondly
, it is complicated for the
government
to monitor and identify genuine cases where family
members
cannot
work
because of family conditions. It may result in injustice to those working hard, taking
care
of family, and working together. To illustrate, those working hard and taking
care
of both worlds will get discouraged if any
such
government
policy is implemented.
As a result
, all
parents
will choose to be at
home
, which will adversely affect the
government
and national economy.
Moreover
, it will put an additional burden on the
government
budget. These are the factors that I think should be considered. To conclude, due to some unforeseen circumstances,
parents
had to stay
home
to look after the family.
Nevertheless
, getting paid by the
government
is not the right thing to do as it is their own choice, and the
government
should not be paid for it.

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