any parents (mostly women) decide to stay home and take care of the family members instead of working. Some people suggest that the government should pay them for doing that. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

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In today's modern society,
parents
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generally
opt out
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to stay at
home
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to look after their children or elderly persons despite having the potential and educational qualifications to
work
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. Many people assert that those who sacrifice their careers for the family should get paid by the
government
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.
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, I disagree with
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opinion as it is an individual's choice to stay at
home
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, and it is difficult for the
government
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to monitor each family from
this
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perception. There are several reasons not to pay those who stay at
home
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and take
care
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of their family
members
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;
first
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, individuals choose to prioritize
work
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or look after the family. It takes immense pressure handling capabilities of
parents
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who take
care
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of family
members
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and
work
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simultaneously. They have to sacrifice their leisure and entertainment time in doing so.
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, their children
also
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understand the significance of hard
work
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in their growing age. Family
members
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also
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acknowledge and understand
parents
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' efforts, which increases mutual respect and understanding in the family.
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, it is complicated for the
government
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to monitor and identify genuine cases where family
members
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cannot
work
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because of family conditions. It may result in injustice to those working hard, taking
care
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of family, and working together. To illustrate, those working hard and taking
care
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of both worlds will get discouraged if any
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government
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policy is implemented.
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, all
parents
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will choose to be at
home
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, which will adversely affect the
government
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and national economy.
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, it will put an additional burden on the
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budget. These are the factors that I think should be considered. To conclude, due to some unforeseen circumstances,
parents
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had to stay
home
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to look after the family.
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, getting paid by the
government
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is not the right thing to do as it is their own choice, and the
government
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should not be paid for it.
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