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One problem faced by almost every larger city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest? 16.09 34

#city #traffic #congestion
These line and table graphs illustrate information about the approximately 30 days temperature and
also
 the number of hours before sunset in Londen, New
York
 and
Sydney
 in a year. Overall, as is shown by the graph,
London
 has the lowest temperature and less sunshine.
Moreover
, New
York
 has the hottest summers, while
Sydney
 got the warmest overall. The temperature pattern for
London
 and New
York
 is quite similar.
London
 got the coldest summers, while New
York
 got the coldest winters.
However
, both countries reach their peak in July, with 24 and 29 degrees.
In contrast
,
Sydney
's climate is the hottest in December and January, with approximately 25.
This
 number will decrease significantly to 16 in July. In regards to the amount of sunshine per year, New
York
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Sydney
 got the largest total amount of sun, with 2535 and 2473.
Furthermore
,
London
 has a much lower average of 1180 hours.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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