Shopping is now one of the most popular leisure activity forms in many young ‎adults. What do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative ‎development?‎

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In many countries, especially in cities, shopping has become the best way for ‎teenagers to relax. It is an immediate and easy option for many people and does ‎not have to plan. I think
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essay, I will ‎support my stand with valid arguments.‎ There are plenty of shopping malls in cities, which are a quick option for many ‎people to spend their leisure time. It helps them relax and allows them to buy ‎their necessities in their leisure time. According to a magazine survey, 68% of ‎young adults choose shopping as their
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explained that 15% of them choose ‎window shopping to chill out.‎ In my opinion, it is primarily a positive development because shopping directly ‎generates revenue for the government in the form of tax and creates employment. ‎If they purchase goods, 5% to 15% of the bill will go to the government. As a ‎result, the government can
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why most metropolitan cities encourage shopping ‎malls and stores to increase their revenue.
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, in Hyderabad, GHMC ‎doubled its revenue after it permitted 50 malls, which helped renovate 20 parks ‎and repair all the city roads.‎
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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