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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Today, several
people
 choose to
work
 by themselves
instead
 of working for companies or organizations. it could occur disadvantages for the option that they choose. Right now, several
people
 in
this
 world have made their own
work
 to stay them alive. Because of the Corona Virus that has changed our lives and
also
 become more difficult for many
people
 around the earth. many companies and organizations collapsed after the lock-down process that held to reduce the separation of the virus.
This
 situation makes almost 15% population of society around
the
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nature lose their job because of the worst economic condition.
furthermore
, many
people
 around the world started a business either its online field or take benefit from the condition of
this
 earth during the pandemic.
People
whom
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 succeed in running their business during the lock-down process has motivated others,
people
,public to become self-employed.
people
 think that when they worked as self-employed they don't have the company or organization's rules which they can make their own rules;
for example
, they do not have to
work
 on time. they can take a nap anytime they want to.
people
 usually can not take a nap in the early morning after doing a lot of stuff in the night. their own rules will help the behaviour of their job. they can start their
work
 anytime they want to. despite all of the advantages that have been mentioned. there are many disadvantages that could make
people
 stop their self-employed spirit,
such
 as the economic growth that always changes every day in the world,
people
 who do self-employed have to stay creative and innovative to maintenance from other rivals, etc.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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